lint: tighten atomic-write-secret.nix's header comment; fix vale contractions in persistence.md

The header comment grew to 39 lines across two audit-driven rounds,
over the 30-line comment-block-lint max. Trimmed to 30: merged the
value-as-argument rationale with its /proc/cmdline justification into
one paragraph, cut the usage example to one call instead of two, and
condensed the args paragraph — no content dropped, just restatement.

persistence.md's first-boot-migration marker paragraph used "it is"
and "there is not" — vale's Microsoft.Contractions rule (this repo's
config) wants the contracted forms, and "is not" also collides with
"is nothing" as a literal substring, which is what actually tripped
the error. Reworded to "it's" / "there's nothing", no meaning change.

Lint-only: no script logic changed, gates re-run below are all lint
checks (no module-eval, no cargo).

Refs #4723

nix/host-modules/lib/atomic-write-secret.nix

@@ -9,34 +9,25 @@
 #
 # The value is a function ARGUMENT, not piped in on stdin: a producer that
 # exits non-zero partway through a pipe still leaves `cat` a clean EOF, so
-# `atomic_write_secret`'s own writer has no way to tell a truncated read from
-# an intentionally short one — the partial content would still land at the
-# live path, `mv` and all, with only `pipefail` reporting the failure
-# afterwards. A caller that computes the value with a command captures it
-# into a variable first (`value=$(cmd)`, which fails under `set -e` before
-# this function is ever called) and passes the finished value in.
-#
-# `$4` is never handed to an external program — it's a shell function
-# argument, not a process's `argv`/environment, so it never appears in that
-# process's own `/proc/<pid>/cmdline`; the write inside uses `printf`, a
-# shell builtin, for the same reason.
+# a truncated read is indistinguishable from an intentionally short one,
+# and the partial content would still land at the live path via `mv`. A
+# caller that computes the value with a command captures it into a
+# variable first (`value=$(cmd)`, which fails under `set -e` before this
+# function is ever called) and passes the finished value in — never handed
+# to an external program, so it never appears in a process's own
+# `/proc/<pid>/cmdline`, and written with `printf`, a shell builtin.
 #
 # Pure function — NOT a NixOS module. Call it from a module's `let`:
 #
 #   atomicWriteSecret = import ./lib/atomic-write-secret.nix { };
-#   ...
 #   script = ''
 #     ${atomicWriteSecret}
 #     atomic_write_secret 0600 "" "$path" "$secret"
-#     atomic_write_secret 0400 "grafana:0" "$path" "$secret"
 #   '';
 #
-# Args: mode, an owner for `chown` (`user:group` or a bare uid, or "" to
-# leave the mktemp-created root:root ownership as it is), the target path,
-# and the value. The value is written followed by a trailing newline (every
-# call site's prior `printf '%s\n' "$value"` behaviour) — a caller building
-# a multi-field value (e.g. `KEY=$value`) assembles the whole string first
-# and passes that. Requires `coreutils` on the caller's `path`.
+# Args: mode, an owner for `chown` ("" to keep mktemp's root:root), target
+# path, value — written with a trailing newline like every call site's
+# prior `printf '%s\n'`. Requires `coreutils` on the caller's `path`.
 { }:
 ''
   atomic_write_secret() {